美國留學申請的個人陳述部分是美國大學了解申請者的主要途徑，需要申請者好好準備，那么我們在準備個人陳述的時候都需要注意哪些問題呢？下面美嘉導師為大家介紹的是在寫作個人陳述開頭的時候需注意的避免的幾個誤區(qū)。

1、救世主型

I am a problem solver. I have an impulse as a kind of instincts to solvevarious problems before me and enjoy doing that. Since I was a little boy, a voice from President Franklin Roosevelt has constantly hovered around my mind, "The world can be changed by man's endeavor, …

點評：一副救世主的形象，小時候就受富蘭克林的影響，立志改變。個人陳述的寫作一定要個人化具體化，別吹大牛，甚至帶著一種霸權主義思維。

2、猶抱琵琶型

Making a right decision at the right time is very important for a young people .At present, I have come to a critical point in my life when I have to make a decision concerning my future course of action. Only a perceptive understanding of oneself will enable one to chart his proper action. Aftercarefully thinking, reviewing my life and analyzing my personality, I make the determination and choose to apply for graduate study in XXX. And I choose to specialize in communications which I will pursue a lifelong career.

點評：重點放在自己要做重大決定上了，人生的轉折點，然后來上句所謂名言警句。浪費字數(shù)，有限的字數(shù)里，同學們應該學會直接，并且抓住重點，突出自己有優(yōu)勢的方面，有特色的方面。

3、抄襲句式型

As a student majoring in Computer Science, I began my odyssey since I entered undergraduate program. Indeed, having entered this splendid computer world, I am more than greedy for something new.

點評：Odyssey 和more than greedy for something new 這種句式不知道是從哪里學到的，很多同學在用。但你要知道，老外恨抄襲，喜原創(chuàng)，所以利害關系大家想想吧。

4、重復簡歷型

I earned my Bachelor of Science degree in … Sciences with a specialization in … in 2002 at … university

點評：美國留學個人陳述不要去重復簡歷中的東西，這在很多學校的PS要求中明確提到，個人陳述的寫作要具體到事件上，事件解決上，而不要單純重復已有的內容。

5、學校介紹型

I am an undergraduate in…University , the largest university anda cradle of scientific and technological talents in China.

點評：該同學的個人陳述開頭等于是一個申請學校的簡介，這好像是在幫助學校做宣傳，或表達你有多了解該學校，而不是寫個人陳述了。這是沒有意義的開頭，白白浪費了字數(shù)，容易被秒據掉。

6、言幼稚型

'Why the gecko can climb on the wall while we can't-' 'Why the leaves turn red in autumn' 'How many stars are there in the sky-' When I was in childhood, I always kept asking my mom all kinds of questions。I am especially interested in how things work, I can even take apart things for several hours in order to find out its principle.

以上是美嘉導師總結的很多同學在寫作個人陳述的開頭時候容易進入的誤區(qū)，希望對大家寫作個人陳述有所幫助。